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Pink diaper baby [May 11, 2008 @ 3:54pm]

kateelliott
[info]aberwyn is back online after a long absence, and if you're not reading her lj, you might find it of interest because, among other things, she is Katharine Kerr, the author of the excellent Deverry novels as well as other books.

Check out today's post, Pink diaper baby, on growing up with a grandfather who was, for a time, a member of the Communist Party.

When sufficiently fueled up with the water of life, he would discourse upon the failure of the Revolution. My grandmother, who harbored no illusions about him or the CP, normally would ignore the rants. One day, however, when we were all sitting in her kitchen, she had had enough.
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[May 11, 2008 @ 5:44pm]

cranky_editors

[jessalae]
"Tyler Braun, 23, a Portland seminary student who opposes abortion and gay rights, said he'll probably vote for Obama because, since he'd would like to see U.S. troops leave Iraq."
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Extreme Arcade [May 11, 2008 @ 8:44pm]
eat_our_brains

I don’t normally post here about the tech deals that I so compulsively shop for, but I’m making an exception today.

It’s the Extreme Arcade Home Arcade Model 9900 on sale at Sears for $599 + $65 shipping.

It’s a stand-alone game machine that loads fifty of the classic arcade games from the Eighties. I have no idea how many quarters I wasted on these games during those years.

Certainly more than this unit costs. If only I’d known to wait…

Centipede!

Super Breakout!

Space Invaders!

It’s got Pong!

And Asteroids!

OMFG! It’s even got Tempest!

Get yours before they’re all gone!

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[May 11, 2008 @ 10:07am]

kateelliott
I have nothing to say but I wanted to offer up two great links.

First, [info]msagara has a fabulous post on Why Being a Mother is like Being a Writer.

9. When you go out with your child, and your child is now under public scrutiny, people will randomly review you. They will tell you what you are doing wrong. They will tell you that if you were a good parent your child would wear his hat/walk in the stroller/eat all the food on his plate/obey you without hesitation/and never ever have a tantrum in a public place. They will also tell you that if you were a better parent and did what all the other parents do, your child would be popular, and if he or she is not, it is your fault. This can be discouraging.

But it is best not to engage with reviewers. It is best not to say "but if you truly understood my child, you would see things differently" because, in the very long run, it will be up to your child to foster that understanding, and in the end, not everyone who views him will arrive at it. You do. Sometimes, you cling to that with whatever faith you can muster, and you continue.

Read the whole thing!


Second, via Mike Brotherton's blog, a link to unbelievably amazing photos of an electrical storm (and photos of people affected by the eruption) associated with the recent volcanic eruption in Chile.
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more mother's day... [May 11, 2008 @ 12:48pm]

sartorias
[info]msagara on why being a mother is like being a writer. Oh, I had to laugh and wince, wince and laugh because there are just too many days when I come to the end of a long day of labor feeling profoundly incompetent at both.
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Poem for Mother's Day [May 11, 2008 @ 12:25pm]

the_urban_monk
I think I was three years old
when my mother punched me in the face
so hard I rolled across the floor
and under a chair, and knocked
the chair over.

I don't know
if that was the first time
she did it, or only
the first time
my memory held on to it.

She hated me, always.
She told me with her words,
her fists and her feet.

She was fat,
had a mouth full of brown teeth
and she smelled of piss,
sweat and cigarettes.

She has been dead for years,
turned to ashes
and given to the wind.

A wind blows this afternoon,
and it smells of orange blossom and gasoline.

I make an offering of incense,
and I bow to her memory.
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mother's day [May 11, 2008 @ 6:58am]

sartorias
The concept of Mother's Day used to bother me not just because of the cynical and deliberate manipulation behind Hallmark's various "days" but because it seemed to imply saluting only those who'd given body birth to offspring. Great idea to salute them, but what about mothers who adopted? "Sure," everyone said. "They are mothers, too." What about women who took in kids who didn't seem to be wanted at home? Sure, they're mothers too. But what if they are men? Well . . . What about the unmarried old lady who goes out to the edge of town every single day, even in horrible weather, to lay out food for the animals people have thoughtlessly abandoned to live or die? What about the woman, or the man, who faithfully takes care of his mother who is helpless after a stroke?

I wish we could call it 'unconditional love' day, because I know that's what we value most in the concept of motherhood--the love that does not demand, just appreciates and gives. Like our animals give to us, if we earn and keep their trust.

So this is my salute to unconditional love, and whoever out there gives it to other beings, without expectation or demand, whatever your age or gender or position in life. Heaven knows, this world could use a whole lot more of it.
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Sneak Peek ARC Cover - A STRANGER TO COMMAND by Sherwood Smith [May 11, 2008 @ 1:13am]

norilanabooks
A Stranger to Command by Sherwood Smith

The Exciting prequel to Crown Duel . . .

Coming August 1, 2008 from YA Angst.

Click on images to see full-size... (Note, this is the ARC edition, not the final cover.)

Cover photos taken by Sherwood Smith ([info]sartorias), cover model is Thomas Lembke.



Cover jacket flat:


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Happy Mother's Day [May 10, 2008 @ 11:19pm]

quietspaces
I do hope, [info]pat_berry, that you have a nice Mother's Day!

Much love,
Me & Al
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"An Accurate Understanding": Talking About Social Structures in Worldbuilding [May 10, 2008 @ 10:20am]

kateelliott
As a writer, I get heavily involved in my landscapes both physical and cultural. Because I like fiction that immerses me in a different world than the one I live in, I like to write that kind of fiction as well.

One of the things this means is constructing societies--or perhaps I should more accurately say variations on societies found here on this Earth--that have enough depth and breadth and authenticity (whatever those words mean) to "feel" on some level as if they truly might exist. Because, honestly, the real world we live in and which has preceded us historically (and prehistorically as far as that goes) is far more complex than what we can get across on the page or "invent." And I do not believe that any fantastic landscape is invented out of whole cloth; I think it is always informed by this world.

I'm sometimes tempted to use a "we" formulation here, as in "we all do this and we all do that" but after all I know I can only speak for myself when I say that *I* can only unfold a landscape in my fiction based on what I know and comprehend and am aware of. So I am limited, in that sense, to my own experience, my own research, my own conversations with others, and so on, and it is incumbent on me, given what I try to do, to continually attempt to extend my awareness.

When I try to describe a social system that is not meant to replicate, say, the 21st century O'ahu one I'm living in right now or the rural Oregon I grew up in, I have to use the terms available to me to describe social structures and interactions. Those terms have developed over decades, even centuries; and indeed, I often accept how those terms are used without necessarily questioning all that much where they come from and how they are being applied. So I'm always always looking to expand on what I (think I) know and how I know it.

That's why I was pleased to stumble across this article online: Talking about "Tribe": Moving from Stereotypes to Analysis.

In this paper we argue that anyone concerned with truth and accuracy should avoid the term "tribe" in characterizing African ethnic groups or cultures. This is not a matter of political correctness. Nor is it an attempt to deny that cultural identities throughout Africa are powerful, significant and sometimes linked to deadly conflicts. It is simply to say that using the term "tribe" does not contribute to understanding these identities or the conflicts sometimes tied to them.

Articles like this keep me thinking about what terms I'm using and why I'm using them and if they are the right terms to use as I, as a writer, try to translate across a fictional setting the images I have in my head.
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"Get more bodies. Raise the morale of the battalion." [May 10, 2008 @ 2:57pm]

the_urban_monk
In Iraq, U.S. soldiers are deliberately killing unarmed civilians.
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Someone Stole My Pen [May 10, 2008 @ 12:17pm]

greyorm

I should have written it down when I thought of it, because now I can't recall what I had come up with.

Too much on my mind, too much stress: everything that comes with buying a house and moving, pushing myself with the illustration contract, trying to get a handle on the IP issue, trying to maintain too many discussions with too many people, constant equipment break-downs at work (I've been here every damn night this week for three to four hours each time to fix either something new or something new on equipment I'd fixed another night), weird work hours because of personnel issues, and all the usual, normal family life and kids-with-health-problems stresses.

Now a page I was going to throw into the tweak document for ORX -- as another additional/alternative rule -- has floated into the ether because I couldn't hang on to it long enough in my mental space.

Of course, it would have been easier to write it down if someone hadn't lost my writing pen I keep with a notebook by the foot of the bed. I'm thinking one of the kids thoughtlessly grabbed it for personal use and never put it back. Grr-sigh. It will hopefully turn up while we clean to move, but that doesn't help right now.

At least I still recall the rules-bit I wanted to provide exposition on:

In the rules section, I talk about Stakes and how to proceed with narration when a player fails the roll. Such a roll doesn't necessarily indicate outright failure -- the orc may succeed at whatever they are trying to do -- but in such a case, achieving the goal becomes more complicated and dangerous or another problem crops up they need to deal with before the Scene resolves.

One of the unspoken ways the gamemaster can use the results of failed rolls is to use each failure as a guideline of whose story to follow for the moment, as well as as way to single out which orc to focus/spend resources on for the time being (rather than simply choosing at random or by fiat, as normal).

This tweak provides a number of benefits, such as a narrative structure by naturally focusing Scenes around attempts at resolving specific conflicts, and the increasing tension found in good narrative, as well as more mechanical tension over the impact of failed rolls. It also adds more structure to play itself, helping to avoid situations where the gamemaster could be accused of playing favorites by not (or seemingly not) harshing on any particular player's orc.

As an additional bit of advice for dealing with the narrative: if the conflict isn't resolved, it can be treated like a cut in visual entertainment, with the conflict resumed in media res in another Scene, whenever the action next returns to that particular set of events. Or the conflict can be ended in narration at the end of the Scene. Whichever seems most appropriate to the narrative.
Any questions or necessary clarifications to any of the above before I post it over on the WHS forum?

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Wonders! Snow and catkins [May 10, 2008 @ 12:03pm]

quietspaces
[ mood | cold ]

Yes, that really is snow that's fallen on the stair railing. Maybe we'll get accumulation, and I'll get some more "Spring Snow on Tulips" photos.



And, thanks to the strong winds of last night, I have a photo of LOTS of Eastern Cottonwood catkins (see May 7), which should illustrate why [info]pat_berry dislikes them so much, having numerous cottonwood trees in her yard. We only have two in our neighborhood, and the catkins from one tree threaten to cover the length of half a city block.

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Yes, well, um.... [May 11, 2008 @ 2:05am]

cranky_editors

[kbpenguin]
[ mood | amused ]

From the latest book by a person with more money than writing skill (and thank goodness for the never-ending supply of 'em, I say):

...leaving his boys standing there with a bunch of pretty girls who were dying to shower Aaron and Andrew with all the attention two pubic boys could handle in one day.
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Don't drop the baby, Obama! [May 10, 2008 @ 12:34am]

cranky_editors

[solteronita]
When he hoisted a toddler onto his hip, the crowed cooed, "Owww."
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Struggling With Short Fiction [May 10, 2008 @ 4:15am]
eat_our_brains

So, the last piece of published short fiction I had out was the short story, “The Session” in Terri Windling’s anthology, The Armless Maiden and Other Tales for Childhood’s Survivors back in 1995. This doesn’t count a piece Rory and I co-wrote back in the early 90’s but which appeared in Revolution SF back in 2005. I’ve been (slowly) writing novels instead.

I had a short fiction career at one point (if one can call a career something that amounted to a)nothing even close to a living wage and b) averaging less than one published story a year.) It wasn’t totally unremarkable. I made it onto the final Hugo Ballot twice and the final Nebula Ballot once. I was (at least in my own mind) a hot young turk. All of my sales were to markets considered “professional” by SFWA. I got the odd fan letter. And I got to meet a lot of cool writers and editors.

But now I’m back at it again and I’m having a rough time. I’m not completely hopeless, I think. I sold a story to the new Tor website which helped my self-esteem a bit. But now I’m working on my latest novel and I’m writing it in chunks that I hope to market as short fiction.

And this is a tricky proposition.

Here is the start of one such tale:


The League of Justice—Thayet, Morty, Annunciata, and Scabby Sue—were trading dirt clods and verbal abuse with their mortal foes, the Fantastic Five—the three Fayette boys and their toadies, Charlotte and Randy.

The Fantastic Five—heirs of wealth and privilege—wore motorcycle helmets with plastic visors and were armed with fiberglass and surgical tubing slingshots, imported from beyond the steel curtain.

The League of Justice’s heads were protected by a collection of cracked wooden and clay bowls, and one wooden box, with eye-holes cut. Thayet wore an ancient pair of sunglasses without ear pieces, held on by rough, brown string. Morty wore an ancient pair of safety goggles. Annunciata wore a diving mask with tattered, torn rubber edges. Scabby Sue had covered the holes of her box with yellowed plastic bag glued in place with oatmeal paste.

Though only Annunciata was a Christian--Thayet was Buddhist, Morty a Jew, and Scabby Sue’s family was something called Unitarian Universalist--the League of Justice scorned their enemies’ store-bought weapons as Godless, a great irony since the Fayette’s father was big in the Church of the New Redemption and Charlotte’s father was a Bishop in the Church of Latter Day Saints.

It was the League of Justice that used the most Christian weapon, the sling of David, a leather flap and two pieces of string four feet long. They wasn’t as accurate as the “wrist rockets” but they cost next-to-nothing to make and when their clods struck home there were great lamentations in the lodges of their enemies.

The two groups fought on neutral ground, outside the city wall near the western gate, far enough away from the guards, away from windows, widows, and non-combatants. The city constables wouldn’t stir themselves unless blood was drawn. That was the reason for their protective gear.

Once before, when the eldest Fayette boy came home with a split brow, constables had called on Thayet’s father. Naturally, the Fayette boys had been mortified and both sides were anxious to avoid this adult interference in their private affairs.

Thayet saw him first, or at least something, just as the city clocker blew the triple “tut, tut, tut” of the third quarter after six in the evening. The western road wound up from the desert, climbing up a series of hills and plateaus and, normally, as travelers came up the last rise, their heads presented themselves first, rising gradually, until shoulders, arms, waists, and finally legs seemed to grow from the dusty gravel like ambulatory century plants.

This time, however, Thayet didn’t see a head. She saw something wide as the road itself, with projecting antennae and filaments and some odd sort of translucent shapes bob above the rise, then raising as it climbed the slope, tapering, but still oddly translucent, the low sun shining through and among a collection of spheres and cylinders and squares and rectangles.

A dirt clod exploded off Thayet’s salad bowl helmet, spinning it around and making her blink in the shower of dust. She turned her attention back to the matter at hand. After a coordinated barrage caused the Feeble Five to dive out of sight in the far ditch, she checked the road again.

The figure coming was a man, she could see that now, or an older boy. He wore a packframe with spreading bamboo poles sticking ten feet into the air and hanging from cross canes was a collection of wicker ware—baskets, fans, broad brimmed hats, and fish traps made from everything you could make baskets from: grasses, reeds, barks, split wood, and strips of old plastic, salvaged from the eaten places. With the sun touching the horizon, his shadow stretched across the earth and touched the city wall while he was a good quarter mile away.

He wore nothing but apache style moccasins, reaching up to his calf, tattered shorts, and a broad brimmed straw hat. He had other clothes for an unbleached cotton shirt flapped from the top of his packframe. Water bottles and a bed roll were lashed lower down, and a leather bag hung from his waist.

He was making a basket as he walked, a cylindrical hamper, working the sides up with split cattail. When he reached the end of one piece he’d take another from the leather bag hanging from his waist, coiled and moist, and thread it in among the uprights, blending it in until you couldn’t tell where the last piece ended and the new one began.

Thayet called for the cease fire as the basket man approached, watching the enemy warily. Both sides knew that the striking of noncombatants would bring the constables down upon them, but justice was not always evenhanded. The Fayettes could strike a blow and evade justice--their father was the district administrator of the Territorial Government. Such injustices had occurred in the past—it was the principle grievance that fueled their perpetual war.

Still, Tommy Fayette stood and waved, acknowledging the call. “Might as well quit,” he yelled back. “It’ll be dusk by the time he gets by.” Almost as an afterthought he asked, “Do you surrender?”

Thayet exchanged glances with Annunciata who sneered and called back across the road, “What’s that? You wish to surrender?”

This almost precipitated another exchange of courtesies, but the basket man was approaching the crossfire zone and Thayet negotiated the resumption of hostilities for the following afternoon, after the Fayettes and their cronies escaped from their respective church schools.

The basket man was passing, then, and the League of Justice looked up in awe, for the baskets were hung as far forward and back as they were side to side, giving him the appearance of an inverted wicker pyramid.

Thayet was surprised, then, when a voice called her name, a voice she knew.

The basket man tilted his head up, raising his broad hat brim, and she saw his face. “Kimball?”

He held his finger to his lips and she blinked, thinking furiously. It was Kimball, little Kimball, the public orphan, the market rat, the errand boy, but taller now, his childhood fat melted from frame and face, and when his startling blue eyes met hers, she felt something odd happen twixt heart and stomach.

He lowered his head and walked on but she heard, “The old place, when the horn blows nine.”

While I know where this is going, I’m not so sure where the short story ends.

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Keeping ahead of the rabbits . . . and the snow [May 09, 2008 @ 11:43pm]

quietspaces
[ mood | amazed ]

There also are new tulips just waiting for a warm day to bloom.




The National Weather Service is predicting rain mixed with snow for the early morning and tomorrow night (high 46F/low 32F). Surely this cannot be true!

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[May 09, 2008 @ 9:25pm]

nonfluffypagans

[jaeelle]
I just.... no words. You guys come up with some.

Spells Cast at Anti-Marine Rally in California

http://www.foxnews.com/story/0,2933,354689,00.html
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how we left the 20th century behind [May 09, 2008 @ 12:17pm]

kateelliott
I walk in from going to the gym and sit down at the computer with my Starbucks chai latte (I know, I know); literally, I sit down, and my gChat chimes.

Spouse is IMing (he doesn't know I've just got in, but I left my gmail open so it appears as if I am online).

"Wow. just has a big earthquake" he IMs.

I check cnn.

Nothing.

Did I mention: he's in Guam**.

So, your breaking news here: 6.6 earthquake this morning in Guam.




** he's supposed to be in South Korea, but the plane broke down and was being fixed at a glacial pace and now they're flying in a new plane.

***Added: He's fine. I forgot to mention that originally because there was never any feeling from his chat that he might not be fine, it was just an amusing conversation on IM. Later news reports suggest there were no immediate reports of damage or injuries, and no tsunami warnings.
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L.B.: Speakerphone [May 09, 2008 @ 1:03pm]
slacktivist

Left Behind, pp. 435-437

In this little section Bruce Barnes and Rayford are playing the Antichrist Game, trying to reconcile what they know about their prime suspect with the many arcane details they've compiled in their check list. Let me briefly try to explain where such details and such check lists come from.

The Bible is full of warnings not to be deceived by false prophets, false teachers or false leaders of any kind, religious or political. Read through the Bible and you will encounter, again and again, various versions of something like this:

Don't be fooled by false leaders. They deceive people with their lies, so watch out to make sure you're not taken in by them.

In many instances, the writer will use a definite generic instead of the plural, so you'll read something like this:

Don't be fooled by the false leader. He deceives people with his lies, so watch out to make sure you're not taken in by him.

Here's the fun part for prophecy enthusiasts: What if that second version doesn't simply replace the plural with the generic? What if, instead, it actually refers to a specific, actual, singular False Leader?

Let the game begin! Get a highlighter and go through the entire Bible, circling every passage that warns against this false leader. (Read carefully -- he goes by many names.) Next, go back through and write down all the descriptions those warnings provide of this false leader/teacher/prophet -- anything that might serve a clue as to this single person's singular identity. And there you have it, your very own Antichrist checklist.

Your final checklist will likely be a bit confusing. Some warnings seem to be describing the False Leader as an Israelite. Other warnings make it clear that he is a gentile. In the first part of Daniel the False Leader sounds like someone very much like Nebuchadnezzar, but in the later chapters of the book he sounds more like someone very much like Antiochus Epiphanes. Later still, John's Apocalypse makes him sound almost like some kind of Roman emperor. This is where the game gets tricky. We seem to be looking for a Jewish gentile who is part Babylonian, part Syrian, part Roman. Trying to reconcile all of those seemingly contradictory descriptions in one single person isn't easy, but that's how the game is played.

(Note: The descriptive details in your check list may seem so irreconcilably disparate or so closely bound to the various biblical authors' distinct contexts that you may even begin to suspect that these details weren't really all intend to prophesy a single, particular False Leader. But that's just crazy talk. Press on -- your speculation about the identity of the Antichrist might end up being wrong, but you won't be any wronger than everyone else who's ever played this game.)

Bruce and Rayford have an advantage over the rest of us when playing the Antichrist Game: They've got a prime suspect carefully tailored by the authors to match every detail of the check list. Yet despite that, they've still got questions, like why is the Antichrist Romanian? This is the question they seek to answer here in Chapter 24:

After the core-group meeting, Rayford Steele talked privately with Bruce Barnes and was updated on the meeting with Buck. "I can't discuss the private matters," Bruce said ...

Bruce and Buck didn't really talk about any "private matters," so I like to think that he's just saying this to give Rayford a hard time. "Hey you know that 30-something guy who's been seeing your freshman daughter? He and I talked yesterday. I can't discuss the private matters -- nudge, nudge, wink, wink -- but we talked for quite some time."

"I can't discuss the private matters," Bruce said, "but only one thing stands in the way of my being convinced that this Carpathia guy is the Antichrist. I can't make it compute geographically. Almost every end-times writer I respect believes the Antichrist will come out of Western Europe, maybe Greece or Italy or Turkey."

WesterneuropeTurkey, traditionally, is not regarded as part of Western Europe, what with it's being in Asia, but if we're going to have any hope of reconciling all of the things in our Antichrist check list then we can't allow ourselves to be constrained by such tired geographic conventions.

Poor Rayford is just trying to keep up. If Bruce says the check list doesn't allow for an Antichristescu, then he'll play along.

Rayford didn't know what to make of that. "You notice Carpathia doesn't look Romanian. Aren't they mostly dark?"

"Yeah. Let me call Mr. Williams. He gave me a number. I wonder how much more he knows about Carpathia." Bruce dialed and put Buck on the speakerphone. "Ray Steele is with me."

"Hey, Captain," Buck said.

Upon reading the word "speakerphone" there I half expected confetti to drop from the ceiling as a Sousa march would begin to play and top-hatted officials would arrive to commemorate this apotheosis of LaHaye & Jenkins' weird fixation with telephony.

"We're just doing some studying here," Bruce said, "and we've hit a snag." He told Buck what they had found and asked for more information.

"Studying" makes it sound like they're translating obscure prophecies from ancient tomes rescued from the library of Alexandria. What they've actually been doing is watching CNN's replay of Nicolae's press conference and comparing his agenda to the Antichrist check list the late Rev. Billings left on his desk before he disapparated. One world government? Check. One world religion? Check. Peace treaty with Israel? Check. Babylonian/Syrian/Roman/Jewish heritage? Hmmm. ...

"Well, he comes from a town, one of the larger university towns, called Cluj, and --"

"Oh, he does? I guess I thought he was from a mountainous region, you know, because of his name."

Following the logic of the dialogue in Left Behind isn't any easier than following the logic of the plot. One bumps into these Python-worthy non-sequiturs at every turn: "Is the town in the mountains?" "No, it's a college town." Huh?

"His name?" Buck repeated, doodling it on his legal pad.

"You know, being named after the Carpathian Mountains and all. Or does that name mean something else over there?"

Buck sat up straight and it hit him! Steve had been trying to tell him he worked for Stonagal and not Carpathia. And of course all the new U.N. delegates would feel beholden to Stonagal because he had introduced them to Carpathia. Maybe Stonagal was the Antichrist! Where had his lineage begun?

The ambiguity of Steve's remark -- "my boss moves mountains" -- sets up what might have been an intriguing mystery. But at this point, 436 pages into a 468-page book, it's a bit late to be introducing a new red herring. The possibility that Stonagal, rather than Carpathia, is our Big Bad is emphatically ruled out a mere 20 pages from now. Jenkins half-heartedly tries over those few pages to milk the question for suspense, but this falls flat since he's already spent so much time establishing that Nicolae is, without a doubt, the Antichrist. Readers thus aren't thinking, "Hey, Buck's right, it could be either one of them," but rather, "Pay attention Buck, you moron, it's Nicolae."

The larger problem with the section I just quoted is that we're in the middle of a Rayford-POV section. The whole point of having Bruce and Buck's conversation on speakerphone was so that Rayford, and the reader, could hear what was being said. Yet we're also somehow able to see what Buck is doodling and to hear his unspoken thoughts. Either Jenkins has completely lost track of which character's perspective he's supposed to be writing or else Rayford has some kind of supernatural mind-reading powers. ... Hey. Maybe that's it. Maybe it's not Carpathia or Stonagal, maybe Rayford is the Antichrist!

"Well," Buck said, trying to concentrate, "maybe he was named after the mountains, but he was born in Cluj and his ancestry, way back, is Roman. That accounts for the blonde hair and blue eyes."

Then again, if this strange-but-apropos Blonde Map of Europe is to be believed, Nicolae's being from Cluj, in northwestern Romania, might also "account" for his hair color.

Bruce thanked him and asked if he would see Buck in church the next day. Rayford thought Buck sounded distracted and noncommittal. "I haven't ruled it out," Buck said.

Following that paragraph is another one of these:

 

 

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Indicating a shift back to Buck's perspective for the following section, which begins:

Yes, Buck thought, hanging up. I'll be there all right. He wanted every last bit of input before he went to New York to write a story that could cost him his career and maybe his life. ...

So immediately after reading Rayford's perception of what Buck is thinking we switch perspectives to read what Buck was really thinking and find out that Rayford had it backwards. Again. This was mildly interesting the first time Jenkins did this trick, less so the next four or five times. Here it doesn't work at all because, again, Jenkins got confused and presented Buck's perspective as Rayford's.

If you're a book editor, you should own a copy of Left Behind to take along to your annual performance reviews. Just open to a random page, have your boss read it, and then remind them that this is why you're worth every penny and then some.

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